What are you talking about? A few pages back Sal asks if "Hannah" talked to her boss to get clearance to meet with Marco. This whole thing is sanctioned under the guise of getting info from Marco, so IA wouldn't be involved. Sal is here to give "Hannah" legitimacy so Marco would talk with them. It all checks out.
Also, it's been like 2 days since the body swap. So if IA would get involved it might be a bit. Let the story develop a bit! And if you're going to nitpick, at least make sure you're not missing major plot points yourself.
Seems plausible if "Hannah" has something Marco wants and Marco thinks he can use "Hannah". They're each bringing something to the table. Given that, seems plausible to me.
As far as backup? Marco wouldn't make a move on a cop out in the open. Too risky. It's a comic, not a novel. You have to infer what happens between the pages sometimes. Limitations to the medium.
It is nice to know you're so invested in the story that you're looking to poke holes in it! I'm just excited to see where it goes. It's been really good so far!
Seems to me like you are one frustrated writer and just want to show off how “good” you are, but just come off as a big dickhead criticizing something that isn’t meant to be profound, just fun and sexy… like, sorry you need to be a party pooper to feel somewhat relevant dude, but you are helping nobody, I promise no one is going to be grateful, so please just let the rest of us enjoy.
actually no, I am very proud of the stuff I have written
if a writer publishes without hearing something critical about their writing then they are screwing up
I always ask my proof readers to be really hard on me so that I can get the best product out
like being attacked by someone that doesn't understand what real good writing is - they use insults and have nothing to contribute
I have pointed out a number of faults with the story, everyone of them could be recovered by having a flashback or having some other action
when I screwed up my first book I wrote a follow up that cleaned up the screw ups. It was the best I could do, but people that could not get past my first book could not get into the second to see the clean up (truthfully it was crap writing thus why I look for the critical comments before I publish)
so, say what you will but one of us wants the writer to do a better job, and one of us wants hack work because they are fine with it
This seems like a lot of arguing over nothing. Pointing out “giant holes” is nice and all. But ultimately, the story will go how the author wants it to go. If he wants to address your comments, he’s certainly free to do so. If he doesn’t, he’s also free to do that as well. We’re all here reading a TG comic about a criminal body swapping with a cop. I think that’s already beyond the realm of plausibility. So I think we can all just chill out.
At the end of the day this is meant to be a sexy story, writing skills don’t always matter when the author is trying to have fun with it, stop moaning and go write your own story if you’re such an expert
not sure why our detective here is not already talking to IA about her interactions with criminal enterprise
ReplyDeleteshe is clearly not undercover
any criminals that are working with her would be paranoid about what she was doing with them and would have nothing to do with her
What are you talking about? A few pages back Sal asks if "Hannah" talked to her boss to get clearance to meet with Marco. This whole thing is sanctioned under the guise of getting info from Marco, so IA wouldn't be involved. Sal is here to give "Hannah" legitimacy so Marco would talk with them. It all checks out.
DeleteAlso, it's been like 2 days since the body swap. So if IA would get involved it might be a bit. Let the story develop a bit! And if you're going to nitpick, at least make sure you're not missing major plot points yourself.
so Marco knows that shes a cop and he's going to talk in front of her?
Deletethat seems plausible?
trust me, criminals would not talk in front of her, they would not have her in a meeting
where is her back up?
I am nitpicking because of the giant holes in the story
Seems plausible if "Hannah" has something Marco wants and Marco thinks he can use "Hannah". They're each bringing something to the table. Given that, seems plausible to me.
DeleteAs far as backup? Marco wouldn't make a move on a cop out in the open. Too risky. It's a comic, not a novel. You have to infer what happens between the pages sometimes. Limitations to the medium.
It is nice to know you're so invested in the story that you're looking to poke holes in it! I'm just excited to see where it goes. It's been really good so far!
for me it is all about bettering the story
ReplyDeleteI have been a writer for a lot of years and I know that you have to have people read it before it is published or you are going to feel like an idiot
trust me, there are few things that feel worse as a writer then to have a huge mistake published
Seems to me like you are one frustrated writer and just want to show off how “good” you are, but just come off as a big dickhead criticizing something that isn’t meant to be profound, just fun and sexy… like, sorry you need to be a party pooper to feel somewhat relevant dude, but you are helping nobody, I promise no one is going to be grateful, so please just let the rest of us enjoy.
Deleteactually no, I am very proud of the stuff I have written
Deleteif a writer publishes without hearing something critical about their writing then they are screwing up
I always ask my proof readers to be really hard on me so that I can get the best product out
like being attacked by someone that doesn't understand what real good writing is - they use insults and have nothing to contribute
I have pointed out a number of faults with the story, everyone of them could be recovered by having a flashback or having some other action
when I screwed up my first book I wrote a follow up that cleaned up the screw ups. It was the best I could do, but people that could not get past my first book could not get into the second to see the clean up (truthfully it was crap writing thus why I look for the critical comments before I publish)
so, say what you will but one of us wants the writer to do a better job, and one of us wants hack work because they are fine with it
This seems like a lot of arguing over nothing. Pointing out “giant holes” is nice and all. But ultimately, the story will go how the author wants it to go. If he wants to address your comments, he’s certainly free to do so. If he doesn’t, he’s also free to do that as well. We’re all here reading a TG comic about a criminal body swapping with a cop. I think that’s already beyond the realm of plausibility. So I think we can all just chill out.
DeleteAt the end of the day this is meant to be a sexy story, writing skills don’t always matter when the author is trying to have fun with it, stop moaning and go write your own story if you’re such an expert
ReplyDeletethat is how I make a living
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